Talk:Unshaken/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 16:06, 30 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

• Needs alt
• RCA → not on any source
• Electric Garden Recording → not in the body of the article or source

• American singer-songwriter and musician → American singer-songwriter
• co-wrote the song → wrote the track
• release by Lakeshore Records → released by Lakeshore Records
• It features Brian Blade on drums, Cyril Neville on cowbell, Lanois on guitar, and D'Angelo on Rhodes piano → remove it's already below and the lead should be more concise

• Prior to the release of "Unshaken", the last piece of music that D'Angelo put out was his third studio album...→ already stated in the release. Remove the same sentence from the release section below
• "each time he was just like, 'it's incredible.' It just blows his mind". → the singer found the game to be "incredible".

• On the music sample remove "D'Angelo sings in his lower vocal register on the track"
• as D'Angelo "crooning bleak imagery over a percussive groove" → as "crooning bleak imagery over a percussive groove"
• D'Angelo opens the song singing in an undertone, which The Musical Hype's Brent Faulkner felt matched the "understated nature" of the track → either replace with a reliable source or just remove the sentece (see below)
• the game's soundtrack → year of release in between brackets
• Lanois took an early version of the song to D'Angelo in New York; they added a percussion track with Brian Blade on drums and Cyril Neville on cowbell, while Lanois played guitar and D'Angelo played Rhodes piano, and turned it into a full song. → Lanois took an early version of the song to D'Angelo in New York. They added a percussion track, with Brian Blade on drums, Cyril Neville on cowbell, Lanois playing the guitar and D'Angelo playing Rhodes piano, and turned it into a full song.

• Remove the photo of D'Angelo, no need for it.
• through RCA Records → source?
• Add "CD and vinyl" to the formats in the infobox

• The Musical Hype is a blog with no editoral oversight → remove

• Fine

• Use {{spaced ndash}}

• Fine

• Musicnotes → publisher
• KZGO → publisher
• Either use publisher and work for eveything or only work/publisher (when its applied)

• You can now address the issues. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:52, 1 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Appreciate the review, MarioSoulTruthFan. I've gone through and addressed your concerns. Let me know if there's anything else. – Rhain ☔ 00:00, 2 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Rhain:I made two chages, one as I felt who palyed the drums and the lead up to the creation of the song and the "rock version" along with everything else would be a better fit on the background, the other as the same description it was already in the text and on the sample. Let me know if you are ok with them. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:18, 2 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Both seem like logical changes to me, thanks for checking. – Rhain ☔ 00:16, 3 May 2020 (UTC)Reply