Talk:Joshua Toulmin

Nice start, but it needs more work. This is my review:

• "Dr. Toulmin's sympathy to both the American (1775-1783) and French (1787–1799) revolutions lead this Englishman to be education by the United States and caused others to see this prolific historian as a religious radical." Something is wrong with this sentence. Bad prose!
• Don't say all the time "Dr. Toulmin" or "R. Toulmin". "Toulmin" is Ok.
• Your three first sections in "biography" are stubby. Merge or expand. I'd suggest merge. They are all about his early life and family. After you merge make also the prose a bit more coherent so that the passing from one section to the other is not seamless.
• Try to have inline citations at the end of the sentence. Cite somewhere in the middle only if it is absolutely necessary.
• Prose in "From Presbyterian to Baptist minister" not good. Many stubby paragraphs. Merge them or expand them.
• I think the information about his main life (after early life and marriage) are inadequate. Can you get us a bit more about him.
• "Caused others to see this prolific historian as a religious radical". I'd like to elaborate a bit on that in a seperate section. Some criticisms and assessments about his life, role and influence in both the American and the French Revolution would be nice.
• In "Works" why do you citate 3 external lnks in the wazy you do? You already have a notes section. Don't you? Transfer this citations there and citate properly.
• A very long list with his works. I'd suggest to create a seperate article and make a short selection with his most important works for this article.
• All the printed sources you used in "Notes" should also be mentioned in "References". Are they? If you don't like this system, then delete the "References" section and have just the "Notes" one.
• All the links in "See also" section are redundant. Get rid of it!
• The "The Serial Dissenting Minister" section has no inline citation.--Yannismarou 08:14, 23 October 2006 (UTC)Reply

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