Talk:Ni no Kuni: Dominion of the Dark Djinn/GA1

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 15:09, 4 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

I'll do this. If I'm not back in three days, ping me. --ProtoDrake (talk) 15:09, 4 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

It's generally alright. Just a few things that jumped out at me on a read-through.

• The lead says that it began development in 2008, but I don't see any other mention of this information in the main body of the article.
• "Ni no Kuni: Dominion of the Dark Djinn is a role-playing game that uses a third-person perspective." - Some clarification on how the camera behaves (such as whether it remains static or follows the character) would be nice, if possible.
• In the gameplay section (this is entirely optional), the screenshot shows a three-member battle party: is it limited to three interchangeable characters, or do you need one human character in battle? A little more specification would be useful here if possible.
• "As they enlist the sages' help, they learn of a wand known that could..." - The name of the wand appears to be missing. If it doesn't have a name, or the name is difficult to include in some way, you can just cut out "known".
• In the "Sales" section, the phrase "the game had sold" is repeated quite a few times. Maybe alter things a little to provide variety.

That's all I really saw that made me pause. Otherwise, it's a good GA-level article. Putting this on hold until the issues are sorted.   --ProtoDrake (talk) 15:39, 5 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review, ProtoDrake! I always appreciate your suggestions, particularly with a topic like this. I've gone through and tried to fix your concerns. Let me know if there's anything else. – Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 08:02, 6 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

That was really all I saw. I think this can pass. Good job.   --ProtoDrake (talk) 08:52, 6 November 2015 (UTC)Reply