Talk:Pic-Nic

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:42, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think this article has been waiting at GAN for long enough! — GhostRiver 17:42, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

• "Contrary to popular belief, keyboardist Jordi Sabatés does not appear in any of the group's releases, as he joined the band after their only published recordings sessions had taken place." → "Although keyboardist Jordi Sabatés is often mentioned as a member of the band, he does not appear on any of the group's releases, having joined after their only published recording sessions had taken place."

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• "Haakon Brenner and Vytas Brenner" → "Haakon and Vytas Brenner"

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• "Jeanette—an English girl that had" → "Jeanette, an English girl who had"

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• "EP" → "extended play"

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• ""Cállate niña,"" → ""Cállate niña"," per MOS:LQ

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• "Haakon Brenner and Vytas Brenner" → "Haakon and Vytas Brenner"

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• End first sentence after "Barangé", then say "Soler and Barangé had previously been part of Els Xerracs," and continue the sentence there

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• "spent her childhood in Los Angeles, until her parents divorced in 1962 and she moved" → "spent her childhood in Los Angeles until her parents' 1962 divorce, at which point she moved"

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• "featured a cover art"

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• "EP" → "extended play (EP)"

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• "what the genre consisted of" → "more about the genre" (don't end sentences in prepositions)

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• "Vytas and Haakon's family" → "the Brenner family"

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• "Brenner's Folk's new formation" → "This new iteration of Brenner's Folk"

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• ""one of the most influential figures in Spanish music between 1965 and 1975."" → ""one of the most influential figures in Spanish music between 1965 and 1975"." per MOS:LQ

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• ""[resulted] from sophisticated orchestral arrangements and studio wizardy."" → "resulted from "sophisticated orchestral arrangements and studio wizardy"." per MOS:LQ

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• "too much of a foreign name" → "too foreign of a name"

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• "and Vytas and Haakon were no longer" → "and the eponymous Brenners were no longer"

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• Italicize Tele Ritmo as the name of a television program

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• ""a most charming album, filled with sparkling, fresh lilting sounds."" → ""a most charming album, filled with sparkling, fresh lilting sounds"." per MOS:LQ

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• Commas rather than em dashes around "starring Pili and Mili"

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• Cut "Despite popular belief"

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• ""solos..."" → ""solos ..."" per MOS:ELLIPSIS

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• Delink "school" per MOS:OVERLINK and MOS:EASTEREGG

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• "missing a lot of class" → "frequently missing class"

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• "fulfill her band obligations"

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• ""go to school..."" → ""go to school ...."" per MOS:ELLIPSIS

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• "Despite the repercussion" → "Despite the success"

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• "briefly tried to continue playing without her but were unsuccessful." → "briefly and unsuccessfully attempted to continue playing without her."

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• "where they got married" → "where they wed"

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• "transformed their folk ballads into something unique" → "transformed their original folk ballads into something more unique."

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• No colon after "Pepe García Lloret described Pic-Nic's music as"

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• "on the contrary" → "as a corollary"

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• "Most of them" → "Most of these songs"

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• Commas rather than em dashes around "a Jeanette composition based on the traditional lullaby "Hush, Little Baby""

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• considered a mythical band both vague and POV; considered by whom?

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• Considered uprecedented and ahead of its time by whom?

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• ""something never seen before, or since, in Spain."" → ""something never seen before, or since, in Spain"." per MOS:LQ

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• "various indie pop artists"

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• Efe Eme should be italicized as the name of a publication

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• "number thirty-seven" → "number 37" per MOS:NUMERAL

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• "number eighty-one" → "number 81" per MOS:NUMERAL

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• Commas rather than em dashes around "a reissue subsidiary of Spanish label Munster Records"

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• "number ninety-eight" → "number 98" per MOS:NUMERAL

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• Commas rather than em dashes around "who has cited Jeannette as one of her biggest influences"

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• Good

• Good

• Images are fair use or CC and are relevant
• Music samples are under 30 seconds and relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Copyvio score looks good, the only thing higher than 5.7% is from attributed direct quotes

Generally looks good – outside of some basic prose and MOS fixes, my biggest concern is in the Legacy section, where WP:WEASEL may apply, as claims are made generally about the band's status. Putting on hold now to allow nominator to address comments; feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished. — GhostRiver 18:11, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GhostRiver thank you so much for taking a look at the article! Regarding the main issues in the "Legacy" section, please let me know if I've fixed them correctly. --🩸 𝗕𝗹𝗲𝗳𝗳 🩸 (talk) 19:01, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

So much better, thank you! Very happy to pass! — GhostRiver 19:24, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]