Talk:Álvaro Betancourt

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 21:10, 7 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will spend some time looking at this review and leaving some comments. MWright96 (talk) 21:10, 7 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• "He made his senior debut when he was just 15 years old," - more concise and neutral at 15 years old,

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• "He earned his senior debut for his nation" - the

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• Delink United States per MOS:OVERLINK

 Done, delinked.

• "At international level, Betancourt captained the Puerto Rico U20s" - better: {{xt|[[Puerto Rico national under-20 football team|Puerto Rico U20 side}}

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• "Betancourt appeared for the under-23 national team in 2015 CONCACAF Men's Olympic Qualifying Championship qualification." - in the 2015 CONCAFAF Men's Olympic Championship qualification stages.

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• Am not seeing the whole of the second sentence supported by the ValpoAthletics source but the NCSASports citation does contain that particular information

 Done, added the NCSA citation at the end of that sentence (and kept it linked at the end of the paragraph as well).

• "While playing at the senior level for the club, he continued to play" - try to avoid the close repetition of a similar word such as "play" in a single sentence

 Done, changed the first instance from "playing" to "appearing".

• "Betancourt found the field a bit more as a sophomore," - better and more formal As a sophomore, Betancourt was selected to play more for the club,

 Done, the sentence now reads "As a sophomore, Betancourt was selected to play more, making five appearances for the Crusaders." I didn't include the "for the club" part of your recommendation because Valparaiso is a university, not a club. I could add in "for the school" or "for the team" if you think it would make the sentence flow better?

• "He had debuted for the club in the preseason Copa Bayamón" - wikilink Copa Bayamón to 2017 Bayamon Cup

 Done, don't know how I didn't manage to find that article. Thanks for the catch.

• "Betancourt captained the Puerto Rico U20 national team in 2013 CONCACAF U-20 Championship qualifying," - in the 2013 CONCACAF U-20 Championship qualifying stage,

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• "playing all three matches in the first round of the Caribbean zone." - the The U-20 national team: picked the harvest source does not mention this, but the Soccerway and Betancourt Captaining Puerto Rico U-20 Team at CONCACAF Qualifiers sources do. I suggest citation bundling.

 Done, moved the Valpo source to the end of the sentence and added the Soccerway source here as well (while retaining it at the end of the paragraph).

• "and played in both matches, but the side were defeated by" - and contested both matches; the side were defeated by

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• "Betancourt earned five caps during his eligibility for the U20s." - better to reword it as U20 side. for clarification reasons

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• "The last time Betancourt would represent Puerto Rico actually came at the U23 level," - more concise and formal was at the U23 level,

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• The whole first sentence of the second paragraph is unsupported by PrimeraHora. Soccerway does mention it though and will require its citation to be put at the end of the sentence

 Done, added the Soccerway citation and moved the PrimeraHora citation to the end of the sentence.

• "He was called up for 2015 CONCACAF Men's Olympic Qualifying Championship qualification" - to participate in the 2015 CONCACAF Men's Olympic Qualifying Championship qualification stage

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• "After three years without an appearance at senior level," - not mentioned by Primera Hora but the Caribbean Football Database does have this information

 Done, added the CFD citation at the end of the sentence.

• "Betancourt was called back up in June 2015 for the first camp under new manager Garabet Avedissian." - the Primera Hora source doesn't mention anything about a camp but it does say it was a match. A minor rewording is required here

 Done, changed the wording to read "first matches" if that works.

• " He would be named to the bench twice more during that international window, but did not appear" - that international window; he was not selected to play

 Done, changed to your recommendation.

• "Sources:[30][26][19]" - the refs should be in numerical order

 Done, reordered.

• The author of Reference 28 should be in the agency section since EFE is a news agency and not an author

 Done, changed, thanks for the catch on this one.

Overall, there are some prose issues present in the article and some statements do not have the correct citation attached to them. Am putting the article on hold. MWright96 (talk) 14:33, 8 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Hey, thanks for the review on this one! I've taken a stab at all of the points you've raised, let me know if there's any issues with the prose changes or if there's anything else I need to fix. Keskkonnakaitse (talk) 16:19, 11 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Keskkonnakaitse: In response to the query, for the team would be ideal when clarifying about Betancourt having more appearances as a sophomore at university. Other than that, am happy with the changes and will promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 18:07, 11 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]