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I've listed this article for peer review because I am working to get this article to GA status and am looking for steps to improve the article before nomination.

Thanks, Jalen Folf (talk) 06:29, 3 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thoughts from Lee V: Hi JalenFolf. Here's a few things I picked up on.

Lede

"independent electronic dance music record label" - WP:SEAOFBLUE, could do with rewording/removing some links.
The refs in the lede aren't really neccesary. Should be cited in prose.
Is the mascot really the most important part of the article? I'd move it down the lede, if not remove entirely.
meme should be linked.

General prose

I think an "overview" section wouldn't be misplaced. It jumps straight into the history of the orginasation without saying what it is, what it does, etc.
"Beginning" is a weird title, something like "founding" makes more sense.
Is it normal to put DOBs for people not in BLPs?
Whilst I know British Colombia is in Canada, the article doesn't mention this is Canadian outside of the lede sentence and infobox.
(born 1989)[4] and Ari Paunonen (born 1989/90[4]) - refs should go ideally after punctuation.
Today, the label signs artists on a single-track basis - seems out of place on a section on origins.
The massive quote borders on copyright issues. Even if not, it's quite promotional to copy a press release like this.
- This happens a lot
Article is very "In X month, Y year..."
There's some sentence structure issues, with paragraphs often being just one or two sentences.
Does the dynamic list for the current artist land a little close to WP:FANCRUFT? Seems a little in depth for me.
Are all the albums notable? There's some that have articles. If they are notable, they should be WP:REDLINKed.

Also be aware Earwigs CV check comes up with this: [1]

I hope some of the above is helpful to you to take the item towards GA. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:46, 18 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]